Why did you work with Logan Hugeny? I get it was a commission and not everyone does work with people they particularly like but this seems to be stretching it a bit. I'm sorry, but crap autotune without any sense of rhythm that blatantly plagiarizes other songs without giving them crediting them or titling the video as a parody of said song instead of as a "musical", is not what i'd call worth while. But ayy, you got work out of it, so that's something.
Logan is a very close friend of mine in real life, we wanted to try something together to see how it would turn out.
Ok, first of all, the glaringly obvious with this is that you blatantly stole TwistedGrim's demon design. From the lack of a mouth, to the black, muscular build with horns and red pupil-less eyes, there are too many similarities for it to be just a coincidence. Even if the design inspired you or Grim's work as a whole did, you can't just plagiarize someone else's work because it looks nice.
Apart from that, there isn't really much to say, it's a trailer, but from what i can see, it has it's pros and cons. The colours are nice and simple, they get the job done right, but the line work is very unpolished. With Flash, you have to constantly fiddle with brush settings and the lines, themselves, to get the lines you want. In this case, they just look like default flash lines, i'm sorry to say.
As for the comedy, i didn't get it, but as i said, it's only a trailer so i can't criticize in that aspect just yet.
The biggest problem i have with this was the cheekiness of stealing someone else's work and claiming it as original, i'm sorry, that is just inexcusable. Try drafting your own character design in a similar vein, just not directly tracing from that design. I hope this review helped give you some insight, and please don't plagiarize art, it doesnt look good on you, my friend.
Its been known for quite some time, even before the release of the Xbox One, that Microsoft will eventually die down. They still use alot of consumer tactics and which are still prevelent on the previous system today. It's a topic that alot of people have already spoken by now, however, i feel that you conveyed your stance on the issue, marvellously. You have some very hearty character designs with distinct expressions with a key sense of fluidity which is set a match perfectly by the floaty animation. The key poses are solid, your colour are neat and eye-grabbing and the comedic blocking is on point but all of those have ran through a majority of your cartoons as i can see, so all i can say in that regard is keep it up.
The only issue i had was with the topic itself, at this point, it's common knowledge that Microsoft are shooting themselves in the foot with their practises and a number of people have discussed this over the last 3 years or so. Despite that however, with the comedic delivery along with the joyous visuals, this holds up on it's own in terms of originality.
A superb job, i look forward to the next cartoon.
Hey thanks for spending time on this chunky review Conahugh! Love lengthy ones. I've certainly gone into a more smoother approach to animating when considering key poses and such, it really speeds up the animation progress twice as fast. When considering the idea on this topix, the problems with the consoles and previous ones they released before hand weren't apparent to me until I bought the newest system myself, and seeing how I was a true xbox nut to begin with made me deny all the talk about how bad and stupid they really were for a long period of time.
So I was a little late especially when the topic was totally obvious, but I hope it's still fresh for people who aren't familiar with xbox and the stupid concepts they have considered and have in place. Thanks again for the review!
This isn't any different from the story-telling minimalism you see on Youtube. I get the art is suppossed to be basic but this is genuinely unnappealing with the bland colours, over-ue of gradients and inorganic linework. Whether the story is real or not is not the issue, the delivery was incredibly forced. Let me just say that constantly swearing and stumbling over your own words doesn't make you seem more down to earth as a story teller, it comes across as more try-hardy and the fact the back and forth's between monologuing were just filler to keep a dead tale going.
I personally do not care for this kind of content, laying out information and having still pictures to complement what's being said is what most people refer to as a slideshow and the forming trend of minimalists art styles (i.e. Domics for example) doesn't particularly help. But regardless, i felt like this wasn't a very engaging , this didn't really need to be told and the art doesn't help your case, it is way to basic, most people can draw stick block bodies, lines for arms and black dots for eyes. You really need to improve in that area. Try experimenting with different expressions and poses that you see in real life on a day to day basis or other forms of media you enjoy like cartoons or video games. Just try to find something you can swing towards to and develop on your art.
It's obvious you have stories to tell and you find that this is the most compelling way of delivering them, that with in it's self is commendable. However, you need to delve deeper and fiddle with way fos telling your stories, try scripting the stuff you want to say or practise some improve, which is something you can do with friends naturally and is extremely fun to do. As for the art, keep working at it, read comics, watch cartoons, watch movies, look outside your window, watch an art tutorial, read an art book, read an anatomy book. Do anything that you see fit to try and expand upon your art style, this is crucial considering this is what will drag the majority of your audience to your work in the first place and will help complement the stories you wish to tell in the future.
I hope you take what i said into consideration, please do not take what i say to heart or as a malicious snap against your work or you as an individual, i'm just trying help is all. Good luck to you and we'll see how you progress in later works to come.
In my opinion, the "DiCaprio not winning an Oscar" bit has been done to death now, its getting quite tiring when people bring it up, particularly as a joke. Besides that, the art was ok but the animation was very stiff and lifeless, the colours were incredibly stale with an over use of browns and greys, the voice acting was kinda awkward with the delivery which made it somewhat funny but i don't think that was the intention to begin with. Also finally, please work on your audio mixing, audio would cut out to pure silence, your cartoon is based in large venue full of people, there should be some background noise at the very least and audio shouldn't just randomly cut out.
i apologize if this review seems a bit too critical or harsh, i just wanted to deliver my thoughts on the cartoon, no harm or malicious intent behind it.
I've wondered for 3 years for that review. Thanks a lot for critical point of view. I learn from my mistake. I will have fixed it by uploaded next cartoon. One more.I'm so grateful for your opinion!
Before is say anything, this cartoon was very easy to look at. You have a very appealing style, beautiful colours, very nicely detailed backgrounds with alot of life in them and this short in particular was very well animated. On a technical level, this was incredibly well done and i commend you on your artistic efforts, everything in that regard was very well crafted. With that said, i'm sick of seeing Undertale parodies on this website, i've seen more Undertale parodies over the last 3 months than i've seen Minecraft parodies over the last 5 years, and it's plaguing the website. I wouldn't mind so much, and im sorry to make this statement on your video in particular but it genuinely saddens me when people, who have worked on a story and concept or have written a comedic piece and has the artistic skills to back those up with their animation skills, are pushed out of the top 5, simply because they couldn't cater to people looking for Undertale parodies or fan-films. I have no problem with the game, and 'm not saying that all Undertale parodies, or parodies in general are bad, but the majority of the ones that are getting the front page spot are ones that are less than a minute long and having nothing to offer but a squirt of try-hardy quirkiness. The game is expansive and theres alot to it, i know, so why aren't people doing more with the material at hand, theres alot to be done and it seems that alot of people are just content with the bare minimum simply because it is their favourite game or they ride along the fandom ready to soak up any kind of Undertale based content whether it be good, bad or mediocre. In this case, you made a pun and pulled a funny face.
I appreciate the effort that went into the technical area of this cartoon, i'm not specifically targetting you when i criticize the writing in most of these parodies. You are not the prime example of a bad Undertale parody or why i hate fan-films of the game, as this is something that has been apparent on Newgrounds for several months now, but it's getting obnoxious to see it so often and with so little attention going into to making it interesting, engaging or funny. Please do not take this review to heart, and i'm sorry if i cause any offense, i'm just trying to make it clear that i don't think this type of content is acceptable with the type of quality control that is on Newgrounds nowadays.
Good Luck with your future projects, i hop to see more of your work soon. Stay Safe
Thank you for taking your time for this review. It was a great read and I will stay safe??
I get the South Park influence but this wasn't funny. The observation was too basic and it just seemed like an excuse to make WolrdStar HipHop-esque jokes. Theres alot more to observational comedy than just noticing something and stating the obvious, people in highschool do that on a day to day basis, you have to deliver it a little more carefully than the way you did. I'm sorry, i just didnt find this at all funny.
Toast is ruined.
Standing here, I realize.
You were just like me.
Trying to make history.
But who's to judge the right from wrong..
When our guard is down I think we'll both agree.
That violence breeds violence...
But in the end it has to be this way!
I've carved my own path.
You've followed your wrath.
But maybe we're both the same..
The world has turned.
And so many have burned.
But nobody is to blame..
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As per usual, the cartoon looks stunning, your colours are top notch and the level of creativity is down right fascinating. I didn't laugh as much as i did from your last cartoon, but i still enjoyed this a lot as a little spurt of experimentation. If i interpreted your efforts incorrectly, i apologize. Regardless, great work as always.
Thanks man, I really just wanted to focus on the art and visual for this one. Not really much of a joke, just a fun experience. Cheers!
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